Saturday

WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS #43

What a crazy week! I almost forgot to sign up for #WeWriWa, AND, I missed visiting everyone else's blogs for their weekly entry. Profuse apologies to all my fellow Weekend Writing Warriors.

That said, I squeaked in under the wire and am continuing on with Katherine. You can read last week's post HERE.

I have shamelessly fidgeted with punctuation in order to comply with the ten line rule.
George noted a tightening of Katherine's lips and a faint blush staining her cheeks, the only visible clue that her parent's behaviour shamed her deeply and felt a tug of compassion. For some reason he felt an insane desire to spirit her away so they could never embarrass her this way again, but for now, he placed the well worn cloak of a shallow man around his shoulders and waded into the inane world of Mr. and Mrs. Bennet.
"I don't mind answering Mrs. Bennet's questions and it's not Miss Katherine's fault for her accident, you see, I was in a mad rush to deliver a letter."
"What, the post doesn't run from London anymore?" queried Mr. Bennet as he dropped the top half of his paper down and looked at George in mock astonishment.
George revised his opinion of the couple, although Mrs. Bennet was rather empty-headed, Mr. Bennet was an observer of people, he'd have to tread carefully around the man.
"Yes it does, but a friend of mine, Lord Alvanley, placed a bet at Whites that I couldn't deliver the letter to a mutual friend's door in less than twelve hours. Alas, I now owe him ten pounds."
"Ten pounds!" Mrs. Bennet gasped out loud, her hand fluttering to her chest. "You must have a great deal of money if you can bet such exorbitant amounts."

Can you see the dollar signs, or should I say 'one pound notes', floating in Mrs. Bennet's head? Check out other fantabulous authors who participate in this fun weekly exercise HERE.
            

14 comments:

  1. Oh yes, I can see Mrs. Bennett's sudden interest now. George seems to be able to read them very well.

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    1. She was interested before - this just cemented the deal in her mind.

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  2. Well-worn cloak . . . What a marvelous phrase and image, Sue!!

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    1. He has been a spy for over five years and the image he portrayed to the Ton was a frivolous man, hopping in and out of bed with many woman. This may bite him in the proverbial bum later on... Hmmmm.....

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    2. I should add that Lord George NEVER actually had affairs - he only portrayed the image, and yes, it will bite him in the bum later on

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  3. Enjoyed the snippet! I agree the 'well worn cloak' line is terrific and I liked watching him calibrate how to deal with Mr and Mrs B.

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  4. Terrific scene in every way. I so enjoyed it.

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  5. Hahaha Mrs. Bennett is definitely more than interested now.

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  6. I think the ten pounds bit works if that's what you're referring to. Love this line:"Ten pounds!" Mrs. Bennet gasped out loud, her hand fluttering to her chest. Great gesture as well. #wewriwa

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    1. Thank you. When you think that some families lived on only five hundred pounds per annum (if they economised with just two servants...) then ten pounds was a substantial amount of money.

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  7. Mentioning lots of money is the quickest way to get Mrs Bennett's attentions, because I've heard it said that it's a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife

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  8. Great snippet. Loved the comment about money around Mrs. Bennett. Best way to get her attention.

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